Thursday, 26 March 2015

My backstroke video

Walt: swimming back stroke
Walt : bake stroke I Tryed my best and I did it (swimming sports)

Wednesday, 4 March 2015

Potato man

Purpose: To describe an interesting character so we can tell a story about them at the Marae stay.
WALT: Entertain (character description)
Think of a character you could write about.
Draw them.  
Introduce your character in an entertaining way.
Describe their looks.  
Describe their personality.    
I think/feel statement (Conclusion / Summary)

I think that I Tryed my best and I like it
Criteria: I can
Self Assessment

Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)
  • use a range of verbs
Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)
  • select one or two similes
  • use onomatopoeia to show sounds
  • select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)
My writing is 2-3 paragraphs (100 - 200 words)

He has potato everywhere.which have circles. He does not like Junk food since he is a vegetable and his favorite couler is ... Yellow. You will never find were he lives because he is on an island nowhere to be seen with fog all around it but he will find you.

Learning Partner Comment
Feedback: I really liked how you made it interesting to read.

Feedforward: You could make it easier to read.
Name: Annaliese
Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?